Welcome back to another edition of Weekend Writing Warriors. This is another snippet from my current WiP, Lessons of War. Last time Chief Inspector Mara Hayle met a liaison from Baron Montagu’s court which just arrived on the colony world of Gideon to “assist” with the investigation of the colonial governor (and the Baron’s brother). They decide to discuss the particulars of the case over lunch, but Antonio Saavedra has other ideas.
Antonio chose a small cafe two blocks down from the Metropolitan Police HQ. After ordering two coffees with sandwiches he got down to business.
“I’m glad you agreed to this. It will make things smoother,” he said.
“I don’t have much of a choice, now do I?” I said.
He took a long zip from his steaming cup of espresso, “No, you don’t and that is the point. The Baron sees it as both a personal attack as well as an attack on his authority. He and his forces are on their way to Gideon even as we speak.”
Seems like things are heating up and Inspector Hayle is in a tighter spot that she realized. As always, please visit my fellow writers on the WeWRiWa blog chain by following the link above.
Nice crisp sentences. Even though they’re sitting around having a conversation and drinking coffee, there’s a sense of action and urgency.
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Hard to pack all I want in such few sentences and I am an hour underwriter.
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Eeek,looks like the situation just got even more tense. Great snippet!
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Indeed. 😉
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I like how Antonio gave the image of hospitality, only to leave Mara feeling uncomfortable and guarded. Nice work!
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There is more to him that meets the eye. Manipulating people is part of his “skill set”.
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Crisp dialogue. War is on its way to Gideon, I think.
RIP Leonard. No one like him…
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Gideon is only the beginning. And yes, we shall miss Mr. Spock….and the soul that brought him to life.
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Ooh. Mara is going to get even more unhappy with the situation. Am I right in thinking the Baron’s men are going to make the investigation a lot harder?
Lovely tribute to Mr. Nimoy.
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They will make everything difficult, for everybody in places far beyond the capital or Gideon.
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When a choice is no choice at all…
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Exactly.
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Oh, no, we can’t have the Baron annoyed, can we? What horrors. 😛 Now they’re going to have to deal with all the fuss he’s going to kick up.
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No we can’t.
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Does seem like a very tight situation, wonder what she’ll do. Great 8!
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Great snippet! I love the short sentences and the way you convey the urgency of the situation in their vocab.
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