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WeWriWa: #8sunday 01/25/15- Mind Whispers


Welcome to another round of snippets known as the Weekend Writing Warriors blog chain. My snippet comes from my current sci-fi WiP, Lessons of War. We skip ahead a couple of weeks as Andrea, scion and Lady Elector of House Kaiser returns home to Chateau Kaiser in the world of Boreas, currently locked in a ice age as a result of human terraform efforts.  After a less than agreeable after-dinner chat with her mother, Archduchess Maria Theressa, she retires to her private bath for a welcome respite while her handmaiden Athena takes a quick shower nearby:

I sank into the tub until the water reached my collarbone. The weariness of weeks of travel and mother’s tepid reception drained into the warm water.  I drifted into a waterlogged stupor.

How could she believe senseless rumors and empty innuendo? That I would risk our House for personal gain?

Because she knows you, dear sister.

Athena, you know better than to mind whisper when I’m taking a bath.

Oh I will, once you admit that you are still thinking about him.

There you have it. A small dose of what is to come. I hope you enjoyed it and as always please visit the other blogs listed on the blog chain.

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25 comments on “WeWriWa: #8sunday 01/25/15- Mind Whispers

  1. This story continues to be very intriguing. Great snippet!

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  2. How awful to have your sister invade your mind while you’re trying to relax. Great snippet. Very interesting.

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  3. Mind whispers sound frustrating! Sisters are pains without that ability!

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  4. Good thing my sisters can’t hear my thoughts! 😉 This is really good, keep going!

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    • It is a bit complicated than that. Andrea and Athena can speak to each other telepathically (mind whisper) but Athena is also a gifted empath and knows Andrea all too well. She read her emotional state and put two and two together. Almost as good as mind reading. 😉

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  5. I feel like those two have a rather interesting relationship — I’d be interested in reading more of this one for sure 🙂

    Liza @ Classy Cat Books

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  6. I like this scene and all that’s happening between them

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  7. I’m always fascinated by stories with empaths and the mind whispering is an intriguing development for sure. Great 8!

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  8. If it isn’t one thing, it’s her mother? 🙂

    I like the premise, the family tension, and the hint of psychic abilities—and the idea of a warm bath, I won’t lie.

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  9. Ah, family… no one can drive you crazy quite like them. 😉

    It might help make things clearer to break up the whispers into their own lines, like dialogue.

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  10. LOL. I love her sister mind-whisper teasing her!

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  11. Teased by the handmaiden, huh? That’s an interesting relationship. I also like the mind-whispering.

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  12. I’m intrigued about empaths, but I really liked this line: “The weariness of weeks of travel and mother’s tepid reception drained into the warm water.” A great description of letting go for the moment. 🙂

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