Do I ever!
Number of Queries Sent: 1
Number of Rejections Received: 0
Expect anything out of the first query, not bloody likely!
Because it sucked. For some reason I can’t write a query that’s worth a damn. I write a few first paragraphs, think they are swell and then once I had a chance to cool down I realize how much they sucked. I realized I wasn’t doing a good job conveying the reasons why this story is worth reading. So I’ve gone back to the drawing table (again) and came up with a few questions and answers that (hopefully) will help me in the quest for a convincing query:
- What does the MC want? To have the sense of family he lost when his father left him.
- What are the stakes? Failure means he loses hi connection to his brother Michale (personal stakes), the the village’s economy takes a dive (public stakes) and loses a chance for happiness with Christina (personal stakes).
- What is the MC up against? His inner demons, differences in culture (P.R. vs. England), scheming politicians, and his father’s image.
- What he must do? Establish a relationship with Michael, fill his father’s shoes, stop the deterioration of the village, and earn Christina’s forgiveness.
All well and good, but am still stuck in translating all of that to the query page (or email). Still at it, though, still at it!