So you’re reading along, engrossed in the action when all of the sudden, bang! The lights go out and you hear strange music in your mind (bow,chicka,bowow!)…errm, sorry that was my Libido (Hi folks!). Yes you just stumbled over the dreaded “sex scene”!
As a rule I avoid them (the old pan up to the headboard, eh?-shut up you), for three reasons:
- they are distracting,
- nearly impossible to get right and;
- almost always unnecessary.
Unless the story is centered on romance I find many a sex scene to be disstracting (isn’t that the point?). Very little character development happens in the actual scene and the action while plenty (and then some) doesn’t move the story forward (and back, and forward again, oh baby hit me one more time!).
And getting it right, forget it!
(You just have to work on your technique pal.)
Depending on the language used the story read like it was ripped from the Penthouse Letters (the cheerleader jumped up and down at the edge of the field, her tits…), OK enough…(spoil sport) or something out of your eight grade health class. Worse when you combine words like “heaving”, “throbbing” or “deflowering” with “penis”, “vagina” and “breasts”. Clinical and tasteless at the same time. Besides most sex scenes just read different from the rest of the story, as if the writer is trying to make up for the lackluster performance of his/hers prose.
Finally, if the idea is to say that the character(s) are having sex (people are still having sex) then just say so. I don’t need five pages of thrusting and heaving and deflowering (sounds like somebody isn’t getting enough thrusting and heaving) to know that their doing it. If I want that, I’ll pick up the latest issue of Hustler magazine or download a video from the Net (that explains a lot, actually).
So my advice to you, avoid the sex scenes if you can.
(You can read my rebuttal here)